7 kinda deadly sins

When I first started writing my 7 deadly sins paper I didnt really know where to start cause I had a lot of options. I decided on a soccer game because I knew I could be very detailed and knew a lot about the topic. My draft was more about getting the general idea on the paper rather than getting a good story down. It was hard getting down ideas at first but once I got going it got easier.
My draft isnt very detailed and needs a lot of work but its a good start and will be good. Based on my green sheet I need to work on my details and expanding on my ideas. My ideas are good they are just incomplete or very broad and doesn't give the reader the effect I want them to have when they read my paper.

Eric DeHond

It was a Saturday night just like any other, except something would happen tonight that hasn’t happened in a very long time, everyone at the soccer game that night would commit one of the seven deadly sins.

            The first of them, gluttony started with most of the fans before the game started, they were out in the parking lot tailgating, drinking beer, and stuffing their faces with burgers and hot dogs, almost to the point of them throwing it all back up. This happened at all home games and has been a “tradition” since the team came to town nearly 10 years ago. The older men have put on a lot of weight because of the “tradition” and their families were not far behind. As a result some of the older men are developing heart problems and have no idea. Gluttony continued during the game with the drinking of alcohol and the continuous eating of food.

            Greed, something that was not hard to find on that Saturday night, began at the ticket booth, pushing and shoving to get to the front of the line even though the game was no where near sold out. These people were the fans that everyone hates, the ones that come to like one game a year and just get so drunk they ruin the game for those around them. Even the employees “participated” in the sins, one of the more experienced workers asked their boss for a significant raise and the boss told the employee “No we will talk about this at the end of the year.” “What?” the employee said. “I deserve this more than anyone else here!” and other comments that cant not be repeated. 

            Pride, this began in the locker room with one of the “stars” of the league, he was talking about how good he was and how bad the other team was. He also said that he was going to score at least 3 goals that night. He ended up getting shut down and barely touched the ball all night.

            Wrath occurred with the referee, there were multiple fouls that game that he gave cards for that were very questionable.

            Sloth, the game the other night was the first place team against the last place team and the owner of the last place team began to drift into a daze because his team was getting destroyed.

            Envy, on the bench many of the players committed this because they were jealous of the fact that they were not playing in the game when they think that they deserve a chance more that some people out there.

            Lust, in one of the suites the players wives are all sitting together watching the game,  and some of the people they were sitting in there with them are admiring the players wives in a way that was unreasonable.